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 | I Don't Wanna Be Married!  [13+] We do not always hear clearly.  |
| (4.0)| Hello Maid of the Mist Most Macabre This is a review on behalf of "Angel Review Forum" [ASR] This is only my views. Please use or discard as you're comfortable with.   Cute story. It kept me entertained throughout. Title and Description - Very cute title that drew my attention. The description urged me to read on. Theme/Subject Matter:- A grandmother takes an impatient and eager five-year-old on a much anticipated camping trip. Once around the campfire, the little girl takes on her own meaning in the campfire songs. Characters - For such a short flash fiction piece, I was easily able to get to know your main characters. Nice job. Originality/Creativity:- A creative story on a very special camping trip. Setting - I know this was a flash fiction and it's hard to fit in details, but even a few sentences of the surroundings would have brought the reader more into the story. Emotion/Impact: - This is a cute story that leaves the reader with a smile and a chuckle. My Suggestions - five-year old five-year-old  usually she was usually, she was  Of course I didn'tof course, I didn't  My Favorite Part: - The part about her singing 'the pillows'   Summary: I enjoyed your story. Thank you so much for sharing it with us. KEEP ON WRITING ON!  Intuey  My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .
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You responded to this review 09/21/2023 @ 10:56am EDT