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 Review #4712890 |
 | A Love Unending  [E] two souls that beat as one "forever"  |
| (4.0)| Hello LynnMarie This is a review on behalf of "Angel Review Forum" [ASR] This is only my views. Please use or discard as you're comfortable with.   This was a good story that caught my attention in the beginning, held it throughout, and finished with an interesting ending. Nice job. Title and Description - It is definitely a love unending! Good title and description that represents the story well. Theme/Subject Matter:- A love that traveled beyond timelines and life times. Characters - Your characters were well-rounded. I was able to get to know them well as I read. Originality/Creativity:- A creative way to tell of a true love that simply won't die. Setting - I was able to visualize each scene nicely as I read. Good job on describing the setting. Emotion/Impact: - The story leaves a good-hearted feeling. It leaves the reader feeling at peace. My Suggestions - for some reason I was complete drawnfor some reason, I was completely drawn  by the way andby the way, and  bluer then bluebluer than blue dressed and wentdressed, and went  mesmerizingand mesmerizing beauty that lie beauty that lay that we walked to walk The night was full of stars, and very captivating. We arrived on time, were seated andNo comma is needed after stars. Insert a comma after seated.  opened by him saying,opened with... light, and fresh. We walked in silence for a bit with my light and fresh. We walked in silence for a bit with my I have never been kissedI had never...  Summary: I enjoyed your story. Thank you so much for sharing it with us. KEEP ON WRITING ON!  Intuey   My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .
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You responded to this review 10/11/2023 @ 3:29pm EDT