I may suggest changes in my review. This is not meant as 'serious' literary criticism (I’m no expert). It's merely my record of the ‘bumps’ I encounter as I travel through your words. If I'm thrown by a typo, an awkward word, or a line that doesn't scan, then it's likely that others will be as well. My intent in giving a review is to applaud your work and maybe help you to improve it. A review is merely another reference to consider. If the suggestions prove useful, then use them. If I ‘just don’t get it’, then by all means ignore me!

The fire world and the ice world slowly, so slowly, moved towards each other - but the ice world was sad because it the fire world melted some of its ice, and it thought this hurt the ice, because it turned into water as it got close to fire. But soon the ice was happy, because this water turned itself into a giant!

They even made is his teeth into rocks!