I am not a professional at this type of poetry or any for that matter, but based on your description, you nailed it.

I like and feel confused by the comparison of diving down and swimming to flying. I like that it's a question, and it made me stop and think . . . While I am familiar with diving and swimming, I am not familiar with flying outside of a plane. I did, however, experience weightless flying in a small 2-seater plane--awful experience. It took me an hour to get my stomach back. Based on that experience, I would equate it, and diving to sinking, as I experience both to have resistance. That said, the curiosity comes from the idea that someone else could experience it as flying so it opens a loop of curiosity . . . Nicely done.

I must close our "debate" by saying that I would think flying would be a light, free, more effortless experience . . . well, unless you are a bee or a hummingbird. (Insert shoulder shrug emoji here).

Only one suggestion: Consider adding it to additional genres. Three that popped out for me are Entertainment, Experience, and Nonsense.


Live and write passionately,
Cyndee


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