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 Review #4712167 |
 | Grandma Fell In The Mud  [E] A professional law firm has a day of tom foolery.  |
| (3.0)| Hello mattdeath This is a review on behalf of "Angel Review Forum" [ASR] This is only my views. Please use or discard as you're comfortable with.   Thank you for sharing this humourous little story with us. I enjoyed it. Title and Description - Your title caught my attention. It's interesting to read the story to see how this title fits in. Your description is good and gives a good indication of what the story is about, Theme/Subject Matter:- The antics are a bit much for those who work in and run the law firm. But for the girls in 'Take your daughter to work' day, and the nephew at home who receives an important call, the antics are all about having a bit of fun on the adults' behalf. Characters - You do a great job fleshing out your characters. I was easily able to get to know the main characters in just a few short paragraphs. Nicely done! Originality/Creativity:-Original story content on 'Take your daughters to work' day. Setting - I felt you could have given a bit more information about the surroundings. But I was able to visualize the most important scenes in the story.  Emotion/Impact: - Cute story. My Suggestions - Megan Bane was driving her daughter to work. It was take your daughter to work day and on the way to work her daughter 10 year old Roberta said "mom last night I had a funny dream."It was take your daughter to work day, and Megan Bane was driving with Roberta, her ten-year-old, to spend the day together on the job. "Mom, last night I had a funny dream." However she decidedHowever, she decided  "what was your"What... Megan responded "well that is a silly dream. Oh but remember no silliness in the law firm."Roberta's grandmother Edna Bane was head of the Bane Law Firm. The Bane Law Firm was known as a hard hitting law firm. Edna Bane opened it 20 years ago. CRIMINAL CIVL PROBATE Megan responded, "Well, that is a silly dream. But remember, no silliness at the law firm." Roberta's grandmother Edna Bane, was head of the hard-hitting, Bane Law Firm. She opened 'Criminal Civil Probate' twenty years ago.  called up nephew at home.called his nephew at home.  Todd said "hello."Martin said Todd said, "Hello." Martin said, Martin yelled Megan yelled " Martin yelled, Megan yelled,  grandmaGrandma  Summary: Thank you so much for sharing your story with us. KEEP ON WRITING ON!  Intuey   My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .
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