I really liked that story, but I did not think that it was funny. I'm not a big fan of little kids getting hurt. Still the story was excellent. However, there were a few mistakes, but I'll get to that in a minute. I'm going to give it a four and a half star review because of how good it was and because there were some mistakes, which I'm getting too now.
When they were saying Kylie's name you should have put it into one sentence instead of separating it into four sentences. Also try avoiding words that end with 'ly', unless it's in the dialogue. Apart from that it was great. Keep writing.

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