Hi Carol
I adore your poem, and with the quantity of content you manage to get in while keeping your poetic form. Truly impressive.

I would love to see this illustrated into a children's book, it seems worthy to become a cornerstone in a little being's upbringing. I would have loved to have read it to my son every night, though alas I'm 20+ years too late. (Perhaps one day I'll have grandkids?)

I have just two critiques.

One: the word Pasch meant nothing to me. I blanked on it at first read, then looked it up the second time though. Haha! It was a bonus amusement, that Pete and his mom are Jewish bunnies at that. Ho ho, oh I just loved that too!

The second critique is: why didn't you get first prize in the comp?

Seriously though, if you are not an artist yourself I hope you have found an artist to illustrate this ready for publication. It needs to be on bedside tables, in kindergarten bags, under a blanket tent with a torch... and other equally important places.



Hope