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 | The 23 Enigma  [E] Woody the wizard has an obsession with the number 23.  |
| (5.0)| Disclaimer: I may suggest changes in my review. This is not meant as 'serious' literary criticism (I’m no expert). It's merely my record of the ‘bumps’ I encounter as I travel through your words. If I'm thrown by a typo, an awkward word, or a line that doesn't scan, then it's likely that others will be as well. My intent in giving a review is to applaud your work and maybe help you to improve it. A review is merely another reference to consider. If the suggestions prove useful, then use them. If I ‘just don’t get it’, then by all means ignore me! I found this piece on Read & Review and enjoyed it a lot. It's a fun story with a good message. The celebration of 23 is well done. The characters are engaging, and I was rooting for Woody to find his Wilma. The happily ever after ending is appropriate and provided a smile. I also picked a couple of nits just for you!  In general, I'd suggest more white space and the font is small for my eyes. You might try a linespace of 1.4. And I offer these suggestions for your consideration: he tirelessly worked on a conjured (conjuring?) spell, The clock struck midnight, and with a resolute heart, he began the conjured (conjuring?) spell. He traversed through surreal landscapes, encountering mystical creatures and solving enigmatic puzzles Overall, a good read. Keep writing! Words Whirling 'Round A poet merely pens a mirror, the reader brings the reflection.        My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .
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You responded to this review 09/08/2023 @ 3:12pm EDT