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A Woman's Heart Knows Best Open in new Window. [E]
A poem about giving love freely.
by God Moving Over The Waters... Author Icon
Review by LightinMind Author IconMail Icon
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Rated: E | (3.5)
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Hello, God Moving Over The Waters... Author IconMail Icon. This is a review from "WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group" Open in new Window.! *Smile* I received "A Woman's Heart Knows Best" Open in new Window. via the random 'read & review' button. I have the following comments to offer.

*Quill*Reader Experience

This poem is about love, light and life, flowers and women, beating hearts and shining eyes. Love a woman and make her day.

*Quill*Commentary

This is my own reading of what you wrote, as it read to me, feel free to disagree with me.

On initial reading, this poem made no sense to me. The first sentence described a flower of life I did not even know existed as a source of light and linked in with the soul of a woman. So I adapted my lens and tried to feel the poem. Even then I think that the author is using words that are preloaded with meaning for herself wrapped up in a kind of nature worship and an identification of women with those themes.

That said there was a gentleness and positivity about the wording which was distinctively feminine and you did suggest a Divine source for love.

Men need women and women need men. Love is the name of the game and the light and life that results from healthy relationships are what life is all about. I guess we all need a reminder of that occasionally.

The poem seems to urge men to love a woman today. Is that any woman or just my woman? How open-ended should I interpret this? I guess you mean something less erotic than just having sex with any woman you meet. So we are talking about showing a degree of affirming affection that releases a little life, light and love into a woman's life and allows her beauty to shine.

*Quill*Mechanical issues

Maybe you should run this through a grammar checker. I got 17-18 errors from 167 words when I did this on quillbot.com in either British English or American


Thanks for sharing.

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