My review is based on professional editing points. It is meant to be honest, encouraging, and respectful in accordance with WDC guidelines.

THE POEM

A poem about what a person goes through when dealing with negative emotions.

WHAT I LIKED

The poem was very succinct and to the point, striking an emotional chord in the reader.

STRUCTURE

This a free form poem with no apparent rythme scheme.

MECHANICS

I did not spot and spelling mistakes. I have some suggestions for punctuation that might augment the pace and flow of the poem as spoken. For example, as written:

Yet as my stomach became an ocean,
it was cold
chills.

I might suggest:

Yet, as my stomach became an ocean,
it was cold -- chills.

Again, the punctuation speaks to the diction and rythme of the poem spoken out loud and only a suggestion.


PARTING THOUGHTS/SUGGESTIONS

Suggestion as mention above. A poignant poem that captures the physicality of emotion.