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The Last Vein ![]() Reg Scribbs, a man who never saw the big picture. ![]() |
Hello, I'm StephBee ![]() ![]()
![]() ![]() Reg is a deadbeat, but he's a likeable deadbeat, which ultimately gets him in trouble. ![]() I loved the setting and felt like I was there. The story fit the quotation inspiration prompt, but the prompt itself (the actual words) was not worked into the story. ![]() This is told in the third person limited by Reg. Good job with narration. Past tense is used appropriately. ![]() There's a good blend of dialogue and narration. Good use of dialogue tags. ![]() There's enough to set the scenes. ![]() TIME: modern day PLACE: The Australian outback This is something that is clarified for the reader. ![]() Reg There's enough here to understand his motivations. He's a drifter due to his personality. He's likable, but ultimately, his greed gets the better of him. ![]() ![]() I did not spot any spelling mistakes. I might suggest a minor edit for punctuation. ![]() The opening engages the reader. A solid character driven story. Good luck in the contest. ![]() ![]()
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