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Galahad Open in new Window. [18+]
A man finds that his name is not a complete waste of time after all.
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Review by StephBee Author IconMail Icon
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Rated: 18+ | (4.0)
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*Note1* My review is based on professional editing points. It is meant to be honest, encouraging, and respectful in accordance with WDC guidelines.

*Reading* THE STORY

Galahad lives on the street and sticks his nose in business that isn't his.

*Smile* WHAT I LIKED

I liked the friendship between Glad and Alberto. The title was appropriate to the story. The story takes inspiration from the quotation inspiration but the quote isn't used in the story.

*Star* POV NARRATION/TENSE

This is told in the third person limited by Galahad. Good job with narration. Past tense is used appropriately.

*Star* DIALOGUE

There's a good blend of dialogue and narration.

*Star* DESCRIPTIONS

There's enough to set the scenes.

*Star* SETTING

TIME: modern day?
PLACE: the streets

This is something that is not defined but could be clarified for the reader.

*Star* CHARACTERS

Galahad

Galahad really does have a good heart, but he doesn't have a good track record of making good choices.

*Star* MECHANICS

I did not spot any spelling/punctuation mistakes.

*Star* PARTING THOUGHTS/SUGGESTIONS

Suggestions as mentioned above. The opening engages the reader. A realistic look at life on the streets. Word count was listed in accordance with the rules. Good luck in the contest.


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