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 Mother Dear Open in new Window. [E]
Young Heart
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I needed to review a newbie for an activity, and visited your portfolio. The title and brief description made me click. I'd suggest you add 'Emotional' and 'Parenting' to the genres, to give the poem more exposure on site.

This is a short poem addressed to the poet's mother. The poem flows well, the rhyme scheme and words chosen bring out the emotions expressed. The poem brings out the love directly and through the use of a simile. It is sincere and relatable.

There seems to be a typo in the last line, I think you mean 'fair'.

Maybe you'd like to use some WritingML, like font, size, line-spacing and centering to enhance the look of the poem.

Thanks for sharing this!
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- Sonali


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