Hello, I'm StephBee and I am an official judge reviewing your story for

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Rhythms & Writing: Official WDC Contest  (E) Use the music provided to inspire your writing! #2002964 by Writing.Com Support

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My review is based on professional editing points. It is meant to be honest, encouraging, and respectful in accordance with WDC guidelines.

THE STORY

Warren has no patience in teaching his daughter, Grace, to drive.

WHAT I LIKED

I liked the presentation of the story. Good use of WDC ML. The story was easy to read.

POV NARRATION/TENSE

This is told in the third person omniscient. Present tense is used to tell the story, which for me, as a reader, was a bit disorientating. Most professional editors recommend telling a story in past tense. Present tense was consistent and the story did not jump tenses or POV narration.

DIALOGUE

There's a good blend of dialogue and narration.

DESCRIPTIONS

There's enough to set the scenes.

SETTING

TIME: modern day
PLACE: urban setting

This is something that is clarified for the reader.

CHARACTERS

Grace

Grace is the main character and she wants to learn to drive. Her father is exasperated and impatient while teaching her.

MECHANICS

I might suggest a minor edit for spelling mistakes. As written: "And she does look too well." I think that's supposed to be doesn't.

PARTING THOUGHTS/SUGGESTIONS

The opening engages the reader. My suggestion would be use the past tense. The characterization is consistent, but all the characters come across unsympathetic. I might soften them up by tapping into how each can be a tad more compassionate toward the other. I can see where the story drew inspiration from the song. Word count was listed in accordance with the rules. Good luck in the contest.