Hey ruwth,
         I see you are the writer who posted right before I did, so I have the honor of reviewing your writing.

         I have to admit that I'm not familiar with this WDC Birthday activity, so I will be freelancing this.

         I did read the rules in the forum, and am not sure you met the intent of the forum. Don't get me wrong, your essay is very good, well written, One can almost see your personality shine in it. I did enjoy the flashback to 2020 though, but I didn't follow the links to the items you referenced.

         I admit that the line, "The last thing I remember that cat and I were going to go explore something." It just seemed that this jumped around some line to line. Why do I say that? The next line says, And where is Adrian when I need him. For one who is not familiar with this activity, it's a bit hard to follow.

         I love the cast of characters in this activity, you meeting up with them would be fun most likely. Sadly, that meeting would be a virtual one most likely. Still, it seems it would have to be a fun meeting.

         What I was hoping to see in this, was you mentioning a suspect, and why you consider them to be a suspect. Or is it too soon for that to be mentioned? Of course I'd want to learn why you consider them a suspect too. That seemed to be the theme of this WDC Birthday activity, perhaps you named a suspect in the forum? I did read/see other posts in the forum and see that the are marked with a to show they are a conversation started by a suspect or special party guest. Now I understand more about this, and after reading a couple of posts, I can see they are far different from yours. Yes, you do need to stick to the party rules (in my humble opinion), and show us you know your stuff (I'm sure you do).

         This is an interesting post, and an excellent WDC Birthday Activity. Thank you for sharing!



Sum1




My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .