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 Review #4669187 |
 | Worlds Apart?  [E] And Yet Together  |
| (3.5)| Hallo! I came across this on random read and review. The poem brings out various aspects of what words can do and the emotions they give rise to. The layout and verse structure work for your message. The brief description and genres work. I'm wondering about the apostrophe in the title - whether you need it there or not. (You are using 'worlds' in plural, right?) I'm glad you mentioned the prompt at the end, to give the poem context. Somehow, while the poem works, I feel it could use more emotion. Maybe examples of the words that brought comfort or made someone cry ... something that would trigger feelings in the reader ... ? Also, I'm not quite sure where the line 'our lives matter too' fits in. There seems to be no implication that a poet's life doesn't matter to anyone else, so this line is a bit of a surprise. The poem has great potential if you could just add the emotion in! Write on!   Entered in "WdC 2023 Birthday Review Raffle - CLOSED"  My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .
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You responded to this review 09/01/2022 @ 10:20am EDT