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The Little Bored Teddy Bear Open in new Window. [E]
A Bored Teddy Bear gets more then he wanted in this little story.
by Princess Megan Snow Rose Author Icon
Review by KingsSideCastle Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | N/A (Review only item.)
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*Bigsmile* This reminded me a little bit of Toy Story with the toys getting up and moving when their owner wasn't around. I think it is reminiscent of the children's book Corduroy about a stuffed bear in a department stor. The story has a good premise. I recommend expanding it a little bit. I think the three stuffed animals could go on a few more adventures before they get into the accident. We get a good sense of how the characters are feeling. I think you can expand on this a little bit more... maybe explain a bit of Timmy's daily routine prior to wanting to drive away. It would help the reader sympathize with how restless and bored the character is. Anyway this is great story. Thank you for writing it. *Teddy*

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