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Hallo!
This one showed up on Random Reads.
The title is apt - maybe you could make the brief description a little more intriguing.

The poem reads well thanks to the rhyme scheme and verse structure. (You could look at shortening the third line of the first verse, though.)

However, I was a bit confused - was that intentional? I guess the poem is open to interpretation. The rhythm of the words seems to suggest an uplifting theme, but one of the genres you've chosen is 'dark' and some of the phrases appear to be dark, too.

However, then again, some phrases suggest enjoyment and play. So all in all, I'm not quite sure what to imagine and am confused about what the poem left me feeling. It could be just me, that there's something I'm not seeing here!

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