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 Earthship Open in new Window. [E]
A description of what an Earthship is and the benefits of having one.
by TJ Marie Author Icon
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Review by Starling Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (3.5)
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This is an article that describes how to build an environmentally friendly house out of tires, glass, and cans.

I would strongly suggest you make your paragraphs shorter. This can possibly be done by dividing up your work into sections, such as Description, Beginning Preparation, Walls etc. It is much easier for readers to read and comprehend shorter paragraphs.


*** (new paragraph)We have not changed the type of housing that is generally accepted in society in over a hundred years or more. …
***... The Pythagorean Theory is when you have three sides of a right triangle, the side opposite the right angle is equal to the sum of the squares of the other two sides (a2 + b2 = c2). …
***(new paragraph) There will also be can and bottle walls created with your tire walls. The cement is placed and formed in the area for the wall with the cans and bottles used as filler.
***Cisterns gravity feed a DC (never use abbreviations without first telling what they stand for) pump and filter panels (WOM) which is make up the Water Organizing Module (WOM) (I moved this abbreviation to here so there is no confusion on what it stands for). A Pump and filter panel (WOM) pushes water into a pressure tank and conventional household water pressure is the result.
***(new paragraph) One thing to keep in mind, do your own research or have someone knowledgeable in plants to help if you are not familiar with them because some plants will grow well together while others will not, you basically will want to plan your garden before planting it.
***I just mention this because there are endless opportunities to create ways getting electricity and living in a green home you can still have WiFi and tv. (I would use the full word - television - instead of the abbreviation.)
***(new paragraph) I am going to concentrate on the Reynold’s experience with electricity here. Energy is stored in batteries and supplied to your electrical outlets throughout the home.
***(new paragraph) An Earthship Power Organizing Module (POM) draws the electricity from the batteries, inverts some of it from AC electricity and supplies it to the home.
***(new paragraph) Some Earthships (spelling) will still use electricity for their stove and fridge or you could go totally off the grid and use a solar oven and fridge with solar power as well; there have also been many who have figured out other ways to use these appliances off the grid, do some research and choose the option best for you.
***(new paragraph) I feel this is the next step in housing, which will be affordable, cleaner for the environment, and much healthier for us to live in.

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