Let's Stick Together [E] Bloom Where You Are Planted |
Very interesting story. I love the aliteration you have used giving human qualities to the cacti. The story read smoothly and orderly. Sometimes this type of story jumps around. You didn’t have a lot of character development but what you did show was well thought out. ***Many others stood round around the leaders and waited for the big announcement. There'd been word on a major change in management of the arboretum. ***"Walter the cactus wren heard the story. When he flew into the interp (spelling) center the other day he heard the in-charge people talking. They think of us as boring, and uninteresting. We are spiny, hurtful. Dry, dusty, and not of this century." ***"So untrue. So short sighted.(hyphenated)(period)” Murmurs came up from the smallest cacti at Stan's base. ***"So what are we going to do Stan?" Aloyisious asked. He always wanted to please and do the right thing, and smooth things over. ***All the rest cheered and the push was on. For the next month (comma) all energies went into the 'big bloom'. My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .
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