...This is absolutely brilliant!! I have to say I've never, ever read anything quite like this - what a creative idea for a story! Now I'm going to re-think my mains and sides, and perhaps give the sides a little more of the limelight. It's a story yet a lesson too . . . that's a smart idea.

The whole story read well, was smooth, and stayed on target. The 'voice' was consistent. I didn't notice any spelling or grammar errors, and nothing appeared in need of editing as it was an easy read that kept me 'in' the story right to the end. Even the paragraphs and spacing seemed 'just right' and kept the story moving smoothly forward.

Again, what struck me most about your story was the uniqueness of it - really clever! I didn't have to 'guess' what was going on - it seemed apparent from the beginning, and was both humorous and serious at the same time which provided the 'lesson' from it all.

I'm not a great reviewer, so mostly I just want you to know that I read and enjoyed your story.

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