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Dancing Dreams Open in new Window. [E]
Leaving it all behind
by A. W. Blackstone Author Icon
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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*Balloonr*Happy WDC Anniversary month, A.W. Blackstone. I am happy to celebrate You with a review on behalf of "Poetry Review Garden [on hiatus]" Open in new Window..


*Cake* What a delightful title and the line about happy feet made me think of the dancing penguin in the movie. Happy! LOL The concept of feet walking in a different direction for joy is so inspiring an image. Dancing as a cure is brilliant. How many dance songs and videos make us Happy? *Bigsmile*

*Balloonv* The rhyming couplets create a light quick paced atmosphere as well. The rhymes are well chosen and I notice the rhythm is not so even in each one as you use 7, 8 syllables and 10. Usually within a couplet the beat is the same. The flow might be improved in some lines.
I wanted to expand "I can't" to "cannot" for a more even flow and drop "my" before "vision".

*Cupcakev* The theme is so relevant and the voice is clear and upbeat as the poet faces the negatives of life and seeks the positive. I like the idea that he knows he has choice. I am sure lots of us can relate to these ideas especially the one on expecting to be still and silent! I worked with a lot of hyper kids and they need to be active as expression. *Smile* I like the word "vibrant" and I laughed at the line about saying goodbye! Great to send someone on their way. LOL

*Confettib* This poem is inspiring and fun to consider and can give hope to those who may feel restricted and want to break free of the walls not of their making. The image of "prison" is a potent one as the outside expectations can build the walls or we do to be safe. Breaking free takes awareness, courage and Happy feet! *Delight* Thanks for sharing your gift and vision.

*CakeB* HAPPY WDC ACCOUNT ANNIVERSARY FROM "Anniversary Reviews" Open in new Window.*CakeP*

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