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Rated: E | (4.5)
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The message of this poem is encouraging. I found the line "I know that we our life can go a bender." to be a bit confusing. There shouldn't be both we and our in one place. The sentence "Seem pretty content to live in a bubble." doesn't include a subject, the subject is implied by the line above, but it isn't a complete sentence without it being explicitly stated. I love the theme but the structure could use a little revision.

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