I was drawn to the evocative title and I like Nature poems so was looking forward to your poem.
Wow. I was so engaged in your vivid vision of nature that I could imagine each image you present in a detailed flowing way. Each line invited me to hear, feel, see, engage with the images you describe. The way you ask readers to do take time to do these things was a consistent voice that worked here.
Your language and word choice created a pleasing soundscape as your use of assonance and consonance was effective. Reading aloud was a treat. "Follow the flit" was delightful and the idea of "fog ghosts" is brilliant. The "crunch of colour" is evocative and I love the crystal of a chime. Words like "Revel" and "Marvel" are perfect. I could hear the wail of the train (nice long a words) on the dark air of the night.
Your choice of natural images cover the seasons and appealed to the senses. You made it feel as if it is truly a gift.
The free format suits the theme and gives room for the full descriptions and for pause to revel in each line image. Good choice. I can't decide if it would be good to add periods to each line for a stronger pause but then you don't want it choppy. I found I was able to identify endings well as it is.
Thanks for sharing this engaging and reflective piece. I enjoyed meandering in your vision. Made my night!
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Greetings Sand Castles Shopgirl . I am happy to celebrate You with a review on behalf of "Poetry Review Garden [on hiatus]" 
Wow. I was so engaged in your vivid vision of nature that I could imagine each image you present in a detailed flowing way. Each line invited me to hear, feel, see, engage with the images you describe. The way you ask readers to do take time to do these things was a consistent voice that worked here.
Your language and word choice created a pleasing soundscape as your use of assonance and consonance was effective. Reading aloud was a treat. "Follow the flit" was delightful and the idea of "fog ghosts" is brilliant. The "crunch of colour" is evocative and I love the crystal of a chime. 
Words like "Revel" and "Marvel" are perfect. I could hear the wail of the train (nice long a words) on the dark air of the night. 
Your choice of natural images cover the seasons and appealed to the senses. You made it feel as if it is truly a gift.
The free format suits the theme and gives room for the full descriptions and for pause to revel in each line image. Good choice. I can't decide if it would be good to add periods to each line for a stronger pause but then you don't want it choppy. I found I was able to identify endings well as it is. 
Thanks for sharing this engaging and reflective piece. I enjoyed meandering in your vision. Made my night! 
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You responded to this review 04/28/2022 @ 6:21am EDT