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Rated: E | (3.5)
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*Sun*Greetings BlueMoon . I am back to celebrate You with a review on behalf of "Poetry Review Garden [on hiatus]" Open in new Window..


*Butterflyo* I am enjoying your style as I read the poems you added to the Garden! *Delight* I liked this one as I could also identify your bolded lines as quotes. It is wonderful how you blended them in your poem in a meaningful way. Awesome. *Cool*

*Flowerr* There is a lot to ponder in your ponderings. I liked the idea of reading Grapes of Wrath with relaxation and enjoyment. The last verse is hopeful and I appreciated the use of the quote.

*Dragonflyp* I was drawn to think about the third verse. Was the name of the poem "As I lay dying" or was the speaker imagining dying.... I liked the idea of being the only one not crying...but having regrets. I think you are missing a word " what I was never able..." *Wink* Drop the comma here too.

*Quill* I think you need a semi colon or period after "rises" in the last verse as I see you are using punctuation in a regular way. A comma after "paradise".*Wink*

*Butterflyr* The free verse style suits this theme and content. I could enter into the vision as it seems contemplative in its imagery. *Thumbsup* The use of some repeated sounds like long i, d, short a add to to the flow and soundscape. Thanks for sharing your gift.


Write on in your style!
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