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  |  | The Snowflake And The Daffodil  [ASR] Lucy's Anniversary 2nd April. All I remember is the chill, the Snowflake and the Daffodil.  |
| (5.0)  Greetings Brenpoet. I am happy to celebrate You with a review on behalf of "Poetry Review Garden [on hiatus]" .  Wow! This is a moving tribute to a loved one. The sad tone is evocative as you take us on a journey dealing with grief. You have captured the season of spring brilliantly and tied it in with death in a vivid manner. The title gives a clear picture of contrast that reminds us of Spring. It drew my attention. The poem was pleasing to read aloud with its steady flow and effective rhyme scheme. The soundscape was appealing and it was easy to get engaged in the theme. The atmosphere is well woven as I could enter the experience with my own memories of loss. The metaphors and similies were apt in building the picture. The idea of a memory bringing sadness jumping up unexpectedly is so real. And songs are potent in reviving memories. Bittersweet as I am sure good memories appear and then the loss.   I noticed a few places where I thought periods might be better than commas. In the last verse I wanted to read a comma after "daffoldil" as the next line ties into it. And maybe a period after "ways." IN verse two maybe a semi colon after song if you don't want a strong pause of a period.Just a thought.  Thanks for sharing this heartfelt expression that speaks to all who have had great loss. A child's death is I think one of the hardest.
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You responded to this review 03/08/2022 @ 1:12pm EST