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Review #4647878
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Dragon Daughter Open in new Window. [18+]
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by Tileira Author Icon
         Review for entry/chapter: "Inauspicious (a poem)" Open in new Window.
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Rated: 18+ | (4.5)
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*Sun*Greetings Tileira. I am happy to celebrate You with a review on behalf of "Poetry Review Garden [on hiatus]" Open in new Window..


*Butterflyo* I love the lanturne form poem and it can be a challenge. You have created an evocative one with a clear image that contrasts the high of a new year to the lower after effects of the night's activities. *Smile* Well, it is not funny but made me smile.

*Flowerr* I wanted to read the article 'a' before "new year" but it would not fit the syllable count. *Wink* It does not limit the meaning of the poem though. The punctuation works well and gives the last line emphasis! Good job. I like that one can imagine what may have happened the night before and one hopes that the morning being bleak did not mean the poet is recalling some of the nonsense or embarrassment. er..maybe. Or just the effect of hangover plain and simple. Love to ponder.

*Star* The title is evocative too and seems longer than the poem. It fits it well. Cool!
Thanks for sharing your crafting of this lanturne. I could enter the vision.

Keep on Writing!
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