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 | Doggy Shoes  [E] A poem about a new pair of shoes for Lucy  |
| (4.0)   Greetings, Sumojo, I am reviewing this today as a judge for the "Writing 4 Kids-CLOSED till Spring" . Your entry is one of fourteen in the January Round. Thank you for participating! First of all, my reviews are intended to be helpful and encouraging, not hurtful in any way. Use what you feel works for you, and leave the rest. Visually appealing Easy to understand Followed the prompt & rules : This story is adorable! (I had a dog named Lucy, who I miss so very much!  ) I could visualize this doggy clearly, wearing her new snazzy shoes and telling the other dogs the news.   Technicalities: Your punctuation was great but for some reason, you didn't use any in the second stanza.  Your rhyming was very good, too, though I wondered about rhyming door with door, if that's something you might consider changing in the future.  It's up to you, of course.   Favorites:Now Lucy loves her snazzy shoes, She wears them every day, And in the park she tells the news To dogs she meets along the way.  My absolute favorite stanza! I just love this visual!  Final thoughts: It was only less than a week ago when I was on a walk and noticed a dog with doggy shoes on! He looked pretty happy. Your poem made me think of him. Nice work and best of luck in the contest!Have a great day and...  K e e p on W r i t i n g ! Cubby ")
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