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 Review #4646351 |
  Greetings, bobturn, I am reviewing this today as a judge for the "Writing 4 Kids Contest "  . And you are one of fourteen entries! First of all, my reviews are intended to be helpful and encouraging, not hurtful in any way. Use what you feel works for you and leave the rest. Visually appealing Easy to understand Followed the prompt & rules First Impression: Cute and creative poem with fun visuals! Technicalities: I really only have a recommendation. Being that it is a children's poem, you might consider punctuation. I was advised of the very same thing, years ago. I was told that children still need to know where to pause, where to stop, etc.   Favorites: What’s this? My heel detects, a wet nose to inspect I could definitely feel that cold, wet puppy nose on my heel!   Final thoughts: I loved the barefoot ending! Nice work. Best of luck in the contest.Have a great day and...  K e e p on W r i t i n g ! Cubby ")
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