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Greetings, bobturn, I am reviewing this today as a judge for the "Writing 4 Kids Contest " . And you are one of fourteen entries!

*Pencil* First of all, my reviews are intended to be helpful and encouraging, not hurtful in any way. Use what you feel works for you and leave the rest.

*Boxcheckb* Visually appealing
*Boxcheckb* Easy to understand
*Boxcheckb* Followed the prompt & rules

*Crayons4* First Impression: Cute and creative poem with fun visuals!

*Crayons5* Technicalities: I really only have a recommendation. Being that it is a children's poem, you might consider punctuation. I was advised of the very same thing, years ago. I was told that children still need to know where to pause, where to stop, etc. *Smile*

*Crayons2* Favorites: What’s this? My heel detects, a wet nose to inspect I could definitely feel that cold, wet puppy nose on my heel! *Laugh*

*Crayons8* Final thoughts: I loved the barefoot ending! Nice work. Best of luck in the contest.


Have a great day and...*Quill*
  K e e p on W r i t i n g !
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