I stumbled across this through 'read a newbie', although I say, "You may be a newbie here at WDC, but you're not a newbie to penning poetry."

This is definitely the kind of poetry I like, and there is a ton to unpack here as to why I say this. Bear with me, I liked this a lot, so this review is going to be longess.

Firstly, this poem hits so many classic poetic marks, and in a good way. It's lyrical, and it has lots of very, very nice images (examples - rivulets have paraded the lane - I will dream of a rendezvous under the shower of a bower.) C'mon, those are too good...

And it rhymes! Classic again.

And "jokes" aside, it rhymes without being sing-songy. This is hard to pull off.

It's gentle and romantic, but not in a drippy, sappy, whiny way. Again, this is very tough to pull of. Most poetry that people write that tackles the theme of love (and its meaning regarding connection, desire and yearning, etc.), fails to move me and makes me want to puke.

Your poem here did not do that at all. I dug it, and I read it a bunch of times while thinking of each and every line, in and of themselves. And it got me invested in the narrator/protagonist. Instead of wanting to slap him or her, I found myself rooting for him/her. When done reading your poem, I was wishing that he/she gets that desired romantic, rainy day rendezvous.

So traditional poetry tropes honored, "A Rainy Day" also has lots of outsidetheaxle angles and touches that round out a standard poetic template that can make a poem trite.

Each line can stand alone. Take, "You seep into dried hopes, reigniting and coddling," This line makes perfect sense by itself, yet it fits into the the rest of the poem tightly, and on different levels. It continues the water healing/cleanizing/rejuvenating theme beautifully for example.

The poem's length is perfect. It's short, but not spare. Some might suggest making the poem longer. Don't listen to them, and don't touch it, leave it like you have it now.

The first line sets up the tone (and theme) of the poem without misstep. I like how its wordplay juxtaposes the poem's simple title, and it immediately starts you on the path (or gets you in your lane, if you will) that the rest of the poem's lines will build upon deftly.

Listen, I could go on and on with praise for your poem (no joke). But let me end this review with your poem's end. I like a poem with a good "killer line" at the end. Your poem here has a great killer two line ending couplet...

Oh no you didn't!



My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .