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Review #4621679
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 Down Through The Looking Glass  [E]
My take on Alice's world...
by 💙 Carly - aka Joan Watson
Review by Annette
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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This is an impressive view of Alice as seen from the top. Of course, my mind is thoroughly infected by imagery from the Disney Alice in Wonderland cartoon movie. That, in turn, works really well for reading this poem and fully seeing the Red Queen's beady eyes. She is such an evil person.
The White Rabbit, mentioned in the second line, is never found. I think that makes sense like the return to the world that is "considered" normal. Because, yes, who decided what is normal anyway?

I wonder why you have periods at some lines, but no other punctuation at all. Poetry does not follow normal grammar rules, but the few periods that are there seem to be a neither here nor there for those rules. Unless, of course, you mean to create even more wondrous chaos through the application of periods. I find the line "Mindless to her ways." could be attached to the one before or the one after. Adding that period throws a wrench into that way of reading it.

Great job at writing this visual poem.

Annette
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