*Magnify*
SPONSORED LINKS
Printed from https://writing.com/main/my_feedback/action/view/id/4619430
Review #4619430
Viewing a review of: {citem:}
Review of  
Review by Cubboo! (22!)
In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army  
Rated: | (4.5)
Access:  Public | Hide Review (?)
Write 4 Kids clip art image

Greetings, marymuses, I am reviewing this today as a judge for the "Writing 4 Kids Contest .


*Pencil* First of all, my reviews are intended to be helpful and encouraging, not hurtful in any way. Use what you feel works for you, and leave the rest.

*Boxcheckb* Visually appealing
*Boxcheckb* Easy to understand
*Box* Followed the prompt & rules Aw, this really bums me out! Your poem is awesome, but the rules stated No Poetry for this round. The prompt was to write a first chapter (non-rhyming) of a children's book. I sure hope you enter again though! You are clearly talented! *Smile* That said, I'll continue on with my review...

*Crayons4* Conflict Fergus is sad because his friends are bullying him.

*Crayons7* Characters: Fergus the frog and his friends

*Crayons3* Setting: Outdoors, near a pond

*Crayons5* Technicalities:

Stanza 3 His friends mean jokes *Right* His friends' mean jokes

Also, just a few areas where the meter is thrown off a bit, but WOW...great little story here!

*Crayons2* Favorites:

Words can hurt and make you sad,
Or they can heal and make you glad.


*Crayons8* Final thoughts: What a great poem! This would make such a cute little picture book. You definitely have talent! I hope you come back and enter another round of this contest. And by the way, Welcome to WDC!


Have a great day and...*Quill*
  K e e p on W r i t i n g !
Cubby ")
Animated WDC Angel Signature for Premium Members



*Gold* My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!.
   *CheckG* You responded to this review 07/17/2021 @ 2:09am EDT
Printed from https://writing.com/main/my_feedback/action/view/id/4619430