What a lot you've accomplished in the limited syllable count! I like the way you've used the prompt word. You've painted a whole picture of the moment. Thanks for including the 'note' at the end, so that the reader can appreciate the poem more.
For me personally, this poem is open to interpretation. (As most poetry is!) It could be that the person is meeting someone they care very much about and are thus undergoing anxiety. Or, it could be that it's a new and perhaps frightening person they're meeting and wanting to make a good impression on.
I'm wondering about the word 'glare'.
I imagined 'glare' to be long drawn out, it doesn't seem to fit with 'furtive'. Maybe 'glance' ...? Just my thought!
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