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 Birth Day  [13+]
A birthday greeting
by David Sumeray
Review of Birth Day  
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
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Ha ha ha ha!

A naughty poem a hotty poem
When you click you think you know 'em

A surprise, in disguise, blink my eyes
But you know it gets a prize

I thoroughly enjoyed the clever word play and the rhythm of the verse structure. The title and genres work. I'm wondering if there should be a bit of word play in the brief description to give the reader an idea of what to expect.

You might want to change the font to 'comic' and make it bold.

Thanks for the chuckle!

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