The title, brief description, genres, verse structure and purposeful lack of capital letters work well.
The simplicity of your language makes the picture all the more clear in the reader's mind, and we can feel what you feel about the place where you live.
Is it a style choice to have 'inbetween' as one word? You could make it two words or just say 'between'.
Also, while the poem works well as is, I would've liked to see the name Silman (I'm guessing that is the name of the street) feature in the poem somewhere. And maybe you could consider centralizing the poem and putting it in italics.
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