Greetings from
"The WDC Angel Army" !

Hallo!
This one showed up on Random Reads.

I guess many parents have said this to their kid at some time or other! You had me smiling there! The verse structure and rhyme scheme work for the poem.

Suggestion:
The title and brief description are about the contest this was entered in, so it gave me no idea of what to expect. Now that the contest is done you may want to change the title and brief description to make this an independent poem by itself. Maybe the details of the contest could come in at the bottom of the poem.

Also, pick genres! You've left all three genre choices at 'other'!

I was a little confused who is speaking. At first I thought it's the Mom, then I realised it's the Dad ...? If so, the kid has a parent nearby ...? And I didn't quite get the bit about the makeover, either. Does it mean the Dad's parenting style is changing?

Thanks for sharing this delightful poem!

Write On!


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