Hallo,
I visited your portfolio as it's your WdC Anniversary.
A whimsical little poem about a love lost, but fondly remembered. The story is well told in simple language with a good rhyme and verse structure. I like the idea of not-missing-a-day coming back at the end, bringing it to a full circle.
Grammatically it should be 'time has gone' but I guess 'time is gone' takes a bit of poetic license and is allowed! Also, 'you're' out of sight or 'you' out of sight.
Maybe consider some WritingML like font, size, and center. Maybe even some color for the type.
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