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| (4.5)| Hallo! I came to your portfolio because you have a WDC Anniversary this month. The title intrigued me and I clicked on the item. The piece captures a lot of feelings -- the tumult one goes through in a situation like this. You've written them directly, in a very relatable way. The ability to grasp and express the feelings that churn is very important for a writer, kudos to you for doing that. There is anger, helplessness, frustration, betrayal, guilt, fear -- you've 'shown' them all without mentioning them by name. My suggestion would be for the formatting of this monologue. Please use line-spacing and font size. I wonder if it was intended for it to be one paragraph. If it isn't deliberate, I'd suggest dividing it into paragraphs for easier flow. I didn't quite understand this sentence: I hear back. Thank you for sharing this. I'm sure it'll help those who are going through something similar, to know that they are not alone. Write On!  My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .
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