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Hallo!
This one showed up on Random Reads.

Well, you held my interest throughout. The dialogue flows naturally and builds the story up really well. The ending made me *Laugh*! Great job on that!

Suggestions:
You've only picked 'contest entry' as a genre, suggest you pick a couple more.
Your description could hint at something without giving it away. The story is good, the brief description should build more expectation.
The last dialogue needs the close-quotes"

Question: Did they put up more than one notice? It's a bit confusing on this point.

Write On!

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