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| My goodness! What a bleak picture you paint of corporate life! And yet, unfortunately, it's true for so many people. I'm not sure which country you're in, but here in India, I can totally relate. While some of it brings a knowing smile, some parts bring sadness -- and the bit about the family (kids and parents) is quite chilling. The title, brief description, cover picture and genres all work for your piece. The layout is good, but I would suggest a line-space for a new paragraph. The piece was very intense. I guess this echoes the feeling of a day in the office. However, I was wondering -- at least during the tea-breaks, if you could also give the reder a break? Include some small-talk dialogue that might be exchanged, or a text or two that might be sent? I found no technical or grammatical errors. Thanks for sharing this piece, it made me happy to have left the corporate world in 1995! Write On! Dream On!  My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .
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You responded to this review 06/23/2021 @ 3:23am EDT