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This one was on Random Reads.

Interesting rhyme scheme! I read it aloud to get the full effect. It works well. You have a unique way of narrating the story of a relationship that broke up.
While the poem works well as it is, I'm wondering if there could be another verse before the last one, about what it was like when they were together -- assuming they were together and then broke up. I think it might enhance the poem to build up a bit before the concluding verse.

Maybe add 'relationship' and 'experience' as genres ...?

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