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 Review #4614569 |
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| (2.5)| Hallo! This one showed up on 'random reads'. My first impression is - you've classified it as poetry, but the layout looks like prose. I think you need to divide it into lines and verses, for your words to flow more smoothly and put your meaning across. This definitely has potential, there are a lot of feelings packed in there, and some imagery. I think you want to convey a powerful, inspiring message, and it is somewhere in there. It's just that, without the appropriate layout, it becomes a bit incomprehensible. I didn't know where to pause in certain phrases and couldn't understand what you were trying to convey. If you'd like me to review this again once you've worked on it a bit more, do let me know. A tiny typo: bounty's - I think you mean 'bounties' Write On!  My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .
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