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Hallo
You bring out some interesting points in this piece.
I agree that morals are different today as compared to a few decades ago, and that gender roles are changing and we need to change our thinking. I appreciate the boldness with which you express your opinions.

My personal view is that this would work better if classified as an essay, it didn't feel like a short story. Also, I think this feels like a first draft, where you've just put your thoughts down as they occurred to you. A bit of editing to channel the flow of thought, and maybe some formatting, would make this a lot easier to read. Perhaps add some sub-headings.

Maybe you'd like to put this through a spell-check. I found some typos that I've listed below.


Thanks for sharing your views.
Write On!

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