The words are beautiful and the verses flow lyrically. I especially like the end - about 'freezing' the moment.
I must admit I had to read the poem twice to figure out what to picture! Maybe it's just me, that I didn't get it to start with, or maybe you meant it to be open to interpretation. But I must admit I was confused on my first reading! I did want to go back and read again, and then I enjoyed it.
You say in your brief description that you wrote it in answer to the 48 hour challenge. Though the poem works as it is, I would've liked a link to that to see what inspired it.
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