Finding Flies [E] A silly story-poem for the Writing 4 Kids Contest. Kermit saves the day! |
Greetings, winklett, I am reviewing this today as a judge for the "Writing 4 Kids Contest " . First of all, my reviews are intended to be helpful and encouraging, not hurtful in any way. Use what you feel works for you, and leave the rest. Visually appealing Yes Easy to understand Yes, and great flow! Followed the prompt & rules Yes Plot Supper time has long passed and the frogs are hungry! Where are the flies? Aha! One frog finds a way to bring them back. Technicalities: I found nothing to suggest for improvement! Great work! Favorite stanza: First to write down six [flowers] will win an appetizer prize!" I've bought myself some time, he thought, and closed his bulging eyes. Acting fast, he watched them write and slyly hopped aside, did a poo behind a log and came back, grinning wide. Final thoughts: I never dreamed I would be doing a search on frog poop, and guess what??? I was quite shocked when I discovered just how big frog poop is!!! Never would I have imagined it! This is an awesome piece (the poem, that is!) and thank you for your entry (along with educating me ) Kids will love this! Have a great day and... K e e p on W r i t i n g ! Cubby ")
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