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 Review #4605825 |
 |  | Frogs Like to Eat Flies  [E] Children's story  |
| (4.5)  Greetings, Marvelous Friend, I am reviewing this today as a judge for the "Writing 4 Kids Contest " . First of all, my reviews are intended to be helpful and encouraging, not hurtful in any way. Use what you feel works for you, and leave the rest. Visually appealing Very much so. I loved the larger font and little icons you included.  Easy to understand Yes! Followed the prompt & rules Yes. Dialogue: Mostly narrated, which works out just fine, as the narrator clearly is asking questions to the child(ren) and most likely would receive a response. This type of story interacts with listeners. What a great piece to read to kids in a pre-school and/or a toddler library program. Technicalities: I have nothing to suggest technically. You might consider a catchier title, such as Eating Flies or something that might capture the attention of readers/listeners. Favorites: Do you like eating flies? I don't like to eat flies. I can truly imagine the reaction of this question on the little ones' faces!  You definitely would catch their attention! Final thoughts: Writing for younger kids is more difficult than it looks. You seem to have a knack for it! Have a great day and...  K e e p on W r i t i n g ! Cubby ")
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