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Frogs Like to Eat Flies  [E]
Children's story
by Marvelous Friend
Review by Cubboo! (22!)
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Greetings, Marvelous Friend, I am reviewing this today as a judge for the "Writing 4 Kids Contest .


*Pencil* First of all, my reviews are intended to be helpful and encouraging, not hurtful in any way. Use what you feel works for you, and leave the rest.

*Boxcheckb* Visually appealing Very much so. I loved the larger font and little icons you included. *Smile*
*Boxcheckb* Easy to understand Yes!
*Boxcheckb* Followed the prompt & rules Yes.

*Crayons* Dialogue: Mostly narrated, which works out just fine, as the narrator clearly is asking questions to the child(ren) and most likely would receive a response. *Smile* This type of story interacts with listeners. What a great piece to read to kids in a pre-school and/or a toddler library program.

*Crayons5* Technicalities: I have nothing to suggest technically. You might consider a catchier title, such as Eating Flies or something that might capture the attention of readers/listeners.

*Crayons2* Favorites: Do you like eating flies? I don't like to eat flies. I can truly imagine the reaction of this question on the little ones' faces! *Laugh* You definitely would catch their attention!

*Crayons8* Final thoughts: Writing for younger kids is more difficult than it looks. You seem to have a knack for it!


Have a great day and...*Quill*
  K e e p on W r i t i n g !
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