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The Three Jacks  [E]
Kid's Holiday Tale
by W.D.Wilcox
Review of The Three Jacks  
Review by Cubboo! (22!)
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Greetings, wdwilcox, I am reviewing this today as a judge for the "Writing 4 Kids Contest " .

October's Prompt:
In 750 words or less, write a children's story inspired by the jack-o-lantern picture prompt.

*Pencil* First of all, my reviews are intended to be helpful and encouraging, not hurtful in any way. Use what you feel works for you, and leave the rest.

*Boxcheckb* Visually appealing
*Boxcheckb* Easy to understand
*Boxcheckb* Followed the prompt

*Crayons4* Plot / Internal Conflict / Goal: Three pumpkins with three different attitudes, try to figure out why they haven't been picked. Will they be left to rot? Picked for pie? Or carved into Jack-o-lanterns?

*Crayons7* Characters: You've given each of the three pumpkins their very own personality and appearance! Good job! *Wink*

*Crayons* Dialogue: Excellent dialogue, though I shouldn't be surprised since you run a dialogue contest. *Laugh* Again, each pumpkin's personality is different and it comes out in their dialogue.

*Crayons3* Setting: A field of pumpkins (or at least three pumpkins) is your setting for most of the story and it is the perfect scene for pumpkin-conversation. *Wink*

*Crayons5* Technicalities: I found no technical issue at all.

*Crayons2* Favorites: "You see, legend has it, that if a pumpkin or turnip has a faced carved on it, and is left out on the porch, the ghosts will pass that house by." Now I have to tell you, I looked up the turnip thing and lo and behold, it's true! I never knew people carved faces on turnips! I learned something new! Thanks! *Bigsmile*

*Crayons8* Final thoughts: You followed the prompt precisely and came up with a very enjoyable story that I'm sure children would enjoy! And I'm so glad that Harold wasn't turned into pie! I can imagine he would taste rather bitter. *Laugh* Thank you for entering!


Have a great day and...*Quill*
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