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![]() | A Spell for Starlynn ![]() a spell, a sestina, inspired by Harry Potter written for a fictional character ![]() |
Hello! I'm reviewing this for "Harry Potter and the Writers' Spell " ![]() I'm not a poet or much of a reviewer, so take my opinions for what they are worth. If you like or agree, great! If not, ignore it. ![]() ![]() ![]() I love that you used some Harry Potter spells in this--great idea! But for those mere Muggles like myself who don't have all the spells memorized (most people, I assume), I'd suggest either dropnotes or footnotes or something so we can see what they mean. You can just give the meaning or you can also give a link for those who want to know more. I looked up the 1st one and found this great link. Either way, I think the purpose of the spell really adds depth to the poem. ![]() So, the 1st spell is a summoning spell. Then you talk about her opening her heart and holding all that is lovely to herself. She is summoning it and that spell adds to that stanza. When people don't know the spell, it takes away from your creative genius. ![]() ![]() There doesn't seem to be a rhyme or meter, but it's not bothersome. Nicely done. I love the kindness and encouragement spoken in this. Though I do wonder about some of the words being used so often. Are they overused--Lovely, world, true, self, etc.? I'm not sure, so maybe not. lol I will say that in the 3rd stanza, "farragos" takes me out of the poem a bit. The rest of the words are clear and simple (minus the spells, of course) and then you throw this in. That's the only word in the whole poem that I just felt didn't belong. It's the reason I opted for 4 1/2 stars. What do you think about putting her name in bold in the last stanza, sort of making her like a magic spell as well? Just a thought. ![]() ![]() My favorite stanza is the Expecto Patronum stanza. It's so encouraging, to me. And it's great for protecting against dementors. ![]() ![]() ![]() This is such a delightful poem! I'm really glad I ran across it. ![]() ![]() Okay, I must be on my Firebolt broom and race off to my next review! Farewell! ![]() ![]()
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