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 Let's Get Physical Open in new Window. [XGC]
After an escape from a bear encounter, Arlynn decides taking things slow is over rated.
by 💙 Carly-wrimo 2024 Author Icon
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Rated: XGC | (4.5)
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Introduction~
*NoteP*          Cadie here for your final review of Building Emotion and Sensuality.

*AsteriskV*NOTE: This review is only the opinion of one author. This review is meant to help and NOT hurt.

Personal Impressions~
*NoteP*          I enjoyed watching your characters grow in their relationship with each other. This story has been a joy to read. It was a bit rough in the beginning, yet you've improved as time has gone on.

Plot~
*NoteP*          Arlynn encountered a bear in the woods that drove her to Ryan's arms. He comforts her and they have a quicky moment on the porch. Later that evening they have another sexual encounter. I don't totally understand why Ryan wants to take it slow with Arlynn, it sounds as if these two have NOT slept together and yet they have. I like that you slowed the scene considerably though.

Technical Aspects~
*NoteP*          Your descriptions give the reader enough information to get into the scene but not general enough to not know what is going on.

Conclusions~
*NoteP*          You've done well over the last six weeks in this class. You've worked hard in this class with these characters. Good Job.

*NoteP* Thank you for sharing and Keep Writing!



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