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Review of Lesson 5  Open in new Window.
Review by Cadie Laine Author IconMail Icon
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Rated: XGC | (4.5)
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Introduction~
*NoteP*          Cadie here reviewing for Lesson 5 in Erotic Language.

*AsteriskV*NOTE: This review is only the opinion of one author. This review is meant to help and NOT hurt.

Personal Impressions~
*NoteP*          I loved this short story. I laughed at the end with the interruption. I was wondering if it was coming, just because that happens when in a vehicle. *Laugh*

Plot~
*NoteP*          How these two met outside of the text messages is unknown. That's okay, it gives a sense of mystery as to whether or not they are really who they've texted they are. They have an evening of talking and building up the anticipation of what each wants at the end of the evening. When the dinner ends they jump into his truck for a quicky. Just as they are about to climax, another lady interrupts the moment and both know they are in trouble. Mark seemingly more than Kate.

Characterization and Dialogue~
*NoteP*          Your characters are realistic and believable. You moved the story along in the right parts to keep the reader engaged in the story.

Conclusions~
*NoteP*          The assignment was to use the senses in the story to create a steamy scene. You did that well. You've got a well rounded piece.

*NoteP* Thank you for sharing and Keep Writing!



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